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 الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير

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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   14th May 2012, 2:19 pm

Seems fine to me. Just fix the spelling mistake.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   16th June 2012, 8:44 am

Lucky me for already reading some of these. XD

Everything approved other than the White World Entrance series.

The first one is more of a A-Ranked one since it resembles that Lightning Illusion Flash thingy.

While the rest of them need to have the part about ranks edited out as Ranks do not matter here much, it should be something related to your Combat Specialty.

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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   16th June 2012, 3:12 pm

Edited then and yes how fortunate you are always there when I need you, it is why I like you so much :3
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   16th June 2012, 4:46 pm

Approved, sorry for the wait.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   18th June 2012, 8:44 pm


Name: Chakra Threads: Razor Wire
Rank: C-Rank
Element: N/A
Range: Long Range
Type: Puppetry Technique
Sub Type: Supplementary, Offensive, Defensive
Weapon/'s used: N/A
Description: This technique simply allows the user to make even his chakra threads a dangerous component to their style of combat. By manipulating the form of the threads, the user gives their threads a razor sharp quality similar to that of ninja wire. Thus the threads become capable of cutting through wood with ease. These do not pose danger to the puppets they're attached to usually, as the threads can be manipulated around the puppet. Several of these threads can even be extended from a puppet itself for such dangerous use, able to latch on to projectiles and such like normal chakra threads. Defensively the threads become stronger of course, thus making them difficult to separate their connections by mere steel ninja tools, after all being of the same quality to combat such. As a downfall for manipulating the threads, one can not suppress their visibility, thus these chakra threads are always capable of being seen. Their color is different as well, from the traditional blue chakra, having a red hue instead. Thus it alerts to danger for those experienced in seeing the technique.

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Name: Scattering Thousand Crows: Secret Puppet Technique - Death Grasp
Rank: B-Rank
Element: N/A
Range: Long Range
Type: Puppetry Technique
Sub Type: Supplementary, Offensive
Weapon/'s used: Scattering Thousand Crows and Derived Jutsu
Description: Using the Scattering Thousand Crows or a derived version initially, the user connects a chakra thread network amongst their bodies. From each body of a crow would extend more chakra threads to other crows. Thus as a unit all the crows become linked in a web of chakra threads. When the crows swarm the target, all of the threads can be used to ensnare the target(s) in this vast network, prohibiting movement. The sub name 'Death Grasp' coming from the omen that crows symbol death, thus being in their grasp. It's a simple technique and effective for surprise.

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Name: Water Prison Technique: Suicide Watch
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Close, Immediate, Water Prison
Type: Supplementary, Offensive
Hand seals: N/A, Requires Water Prison Technique Success
Targeted sense/'es: Sight, Touch, Sound
Description: This genjutsu can be triggered on someone only if caught in the Water Prison Technique. This genjutsu produces the illusion that changes the waters surrounding the target become flames and their body is on fire. The flaming orb fills with soot and smoke, clouding their sight and choking them making them in reality gasp for air during their burning torture. The reality of the situation however does not change, for they are indeed still trapped in water and risk the possibility of drowning on their own, thus "Suicide Watch". Regardless, the burning flames experienced, soot, and smoke can really wear down on the mind and cause them to lose consciousness while in the water, still risking the possibility of drowning. This genjutsu induced sleep lasts for 3 posts(plus 1 post for every genjutsu level under the user's). /font]
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   19th June 2012, 8:41 am

All approved, tho you do have some coding mistakes.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   1st July 2012, 10:00 pm


Name: Secret Puppet Technique: Skillful Puppet Handling
Rank: E-Rank
Element: N/A
Range: N/A
Type: Puppet Technique
Sub Type: Supplementary
Weapon/'s used: N/A
Description: This is a developed skill taking advantage of the advanced dexterity of a puppet user. This being a skill does not require chakra for use. This skill allows the puppet user to make hand seals for jutsu while having threads intact with a puppet without influencing its actions unless willed.

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Name: Secret Puppet Technique: Transitioning
Rank: D-Rank
Element: N/A
Range: N/A
Type: Puppet Technique
Sub Type: Supplementary
Weapon/'s used: N/A
Description: This technique is similar to that of the substitution jutsu and could be compared to even the body flicker technique. This jutsu allows the puppet user to switch positions with whatever their chakra threads are connected to. Ideally this would be used to swap places with a puppet during a given situation. The object the user is swapping places with has to be logical. For instance they would not be able to swap places with a rooted tree or something like a house. This is limited to work with objects no more than twice their size.

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Name: Genjutsu Kai: Counter
Rank: B-Rank
Range: N/A
Type: Defensive
Hand seals: N/A
Targeted sense/'es: Situational
Description: This is a form of genjutsu release that in turn counters the attacker by executing a genjutsu known to the user. Despite this jutsu being B-ranked, the chakra used for this technique depends on the genjutsu being released and the one executed in return. The user uses the chakra of the released genjutsu to execute one of equal or lesser chakra amount (not rank). This technique bypasses original requirements of the genjutsu to be executed as part of the counter. The result is to be instantaneous and meant to catch the attacker off guard and buy the user time. The use of this technique still follows the guidelines of the original genjutsu kai in terms of genjutsu skill level.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   2nd July 2012, 6:33 pm

Name: Secret Puppet Technique: Skillful Puppet Handling

Approved.


Name: Secret Puppet Technique: Transitioning

If you get your threads to attach to an opponent are you able to transition their positions too? That's my only question.


Name: Genjutsu Kai: Counter

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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   2nd July 2012, 6:51 pm

Hmm I honestly did not think about that situation but yeah I suppose it would work in that case wouldn't it lol
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   2nd July 2012, 6:53 pm

Due to the logical standpoint of the technique than


Name: Secret Puppet Technique: Transitioning
Name: Secret Puppet Technique: Skillful Puppet Handling
Name: Genjutsu Kai: Counter

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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   13th July 2012, 7:19 pm

Name: Revelation Style
Rank: B-Rank
Element/'s: N/A
Range: Close
Type: Taijutsu
Sub Type: Offensive, Defensive
Hand seals: N/A
Description: This is a style of fighting that utilizes precise and quick attacks. This style focuses on mainly out maneuvering the opponent and in cases of being attacked using the opponents body posture against them. Users of this style utilize chakra upon connecting hits only. This precise timing of sudden chakra release helps conserve chakra and make sure it's not expelled on missed attacks and also brings about a stun factor or surprise in the sudden increase of damage differing from the assumed or expected amount from the look of how the attack is being executed. Utilizing this fighting style, one can make what appears to be a quick and light punch suddenly a hard blow that uses the max damage output possible for the user's taijutsu level. This taijutsu art is a great showing of deception in the battle field. It takes advantage of the opponent's judgement and how they perceive the attack and brings about a revelation that it is more than it seems. Suddenly what looks like a light jab hits like a full body swing.

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Name: Gēmu (ゲーム; Literally translated to "Game")
Rank: A-Rank
Range: 30 Meters
Type: Supplementary
Hand seals: Clap Hands
Targeted sense/'es: Thought, Touch
Description: This genjutsu is applied by setting up a field and emitting the user's chakra signal onto others that enter the range around the user. Those within this range are brought under the illusion that simply applies rules to reality. The rules made up are left up to the user's description. If one is to go against the rule, they suffer a punishment that goes along with the rule. The damage they suffer is dealt by themselves as part of the rule. Their can only be one rule and punishment throughout the duration of the technique and it can not be changed once it is made. Limit's on the rule: It can not prohibit people from leaving the range of the technique nor can it specifically state attacks against the user are forbidden. Any pain dealt as a result of the punishment does not release the person from the genjutsu. However one may release the genjutsu by other means unless prohibited by the rule. The punishment can not be avoided and is an automatic response as soon as the rule is being broken. The rule does not have to be spoken by the user however it must be detailed in the post, explicitly, along with the resulting punishment. There is an upkeep of this jutsu of c-rank chakra.

Now just to provide example: A rule would be stated "Speaking is now forbidden and if you speak, you must stab yourself in the eye with your thumb." Therefore if the target were to even attempt speak a word from the point of being affected by this jutsu, their brain will automatically cause them to automatically stab themselves in the eye.

Another example: "Feeling scared is now forbidden and if you ever have a feeling of fear from this point on you must punch yourself in the groin" Then if at any point a character thinks something is scary or worth being afraid of then they will automatically punch themselves in the groin.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   14th July 2012, 2:42 pm

Genesis wrote:
Name: Revelation Style
Rank: B-Rank
Element/'s: N/A
Range: Close
Type: Taijutsu
Sub Type: Offensive, Defensive
Hand seals: N/A
Description: This is a style of fighting that utilizes precise and quick attacks. This style focuses on mainly out maneuvering the opponent and in cases of being attacked using the opponents body posture against them. Users of this style utilize chakra upon connecting hits only. This precise timing of sudden chakra release helps conserve chakra and make sure it's not expelled on missed attacks and also brings about a stun factor or surprise in the sudden increase of damage differing from the assumed or expected amount from the look of how the attack is being executed. Utilizing this fighting style, one can make what appears to be a quick and light punch suddenly a hard blow that uses the max damage output possible for the user's taijutsu level. This taijutsu art is a great showing of deception in the battle field. It takes advantage of the opponent's judgement and how they perceive the attack and brings about a revelation that it is more than it seems. Suddenly what looks like a light jab hits like a full body swing.


Interesting, might wanna add some techniques to detail how exactly do you incorporate this style. Atm this is rather vague.
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Name: Gēmu (ゲーム; Literally translated to "Game")
Rank: A-Rank
Range: 30 Meters
Type: Supplementary
Hand seals: Clap Hands
Targeted sense/'es: Thought, Touch
Description: This genjutsu is applied by setting up a field and emitting the user's chakra signal onto others that enter the range around the user. Those within this range are brought under the illusion that simply applies rules to reality. The rules made up are left up to the user's description. If one is to go against the rule, they suffer a punishment that goes along with the rule. The damage they suffer is dealt by themselves as part of the rule. Their can only be one rule and punishment throughout the duration of the technique and it can not be changed once it is made. Limit's on the rule: It can not prohibit people from leaving the range of the technique nor can it specifically state attacks against the user are forbidden. Any pain dealt as a result of the punishment does not release the person from the genjutsu. However one may release the genjutsu by other means unless prohibited by the rule. The punishment can not be avoided and is an automatic response as soon as the rule is being broken. The rule does not have to be spoken by the user however it must be detailed in the post, explicitly, along with the resulting punishment. There is an upkeep of this jutsu of c-rank chakra.

Now just to provide example: A rule would be stated "Speaking is now forbidden and if you speak, you must stab yourself in the eye with your thumb." Therefore if the target were to even attempt speak a word from the point of being affected by this jutsu, their brain will automatically cause them to automatically stab themselves in the eye.

Another example: "Feeling scared is now forbidden and if you ever have a feeling of fear from this point on you must punch yourself in the groin" Then if at any point a character thinks something is scary or worth being afraid of then they will automatically punch themselves in the groin.


So, just one rule per usage of the technique?
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   15th July 2012, 12:44 pm

I'm honestly not used to making up taijutsu stuff so I guess it is vague as it stands. When you say come up with some techniques, do you mean make separate taijutsu attacks that branch off of this style?

As for the genjutsu, yes it's 1 rule per usage.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   15th July 2012, 12:52 pm

Yes, that is what I ask.

Genjutsu approved.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   15th July 2012, 1:02 pm

Okay I can do that later I suppose. This is gonna become costly o.o
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   29th July 2012, 12:11 am

Name: Water Release: Blitz Strike
Rank: A-Rank
Element/'s: Water Release
Range: 25 Meters
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub Type: Offensive
Hand seals: 2 Post Charge Time
Description: The user gathers water affinity chakra into their hands in a sphere like shape. Notice how it says water affinity chakra and not water. This is because in the charging state, the chakra is still in it's raw sate and lacks complete nature transformation. This makes the orb look like a glowing light blue orb yet gives no visible signal as to what nature it is. After the chakra has been concentrated, the user thrust their hands forward unleashing a highly pressurized blast of water. This blast of water spear heads toward a target with enough force to crush through the toughest of defenses, including earth and wood release of lower rank. The blast is linear but can have it's path manipulated.


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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   29th July 2012, 8:52 am

No,

This can not break through any defense made by any element, since there are things like an Elemental Chart we stick to, so Earth in itself would overpower it, as well as any other element outranking this technique.

If it hits a human being, what will it do to them? Crush bones? Tear Organs?
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   29th July 2012, 11:13 am

Talked to Marcus, edited. And if it hits a person, what do you think will happen o.o Obviously they'll get split open or obliterated depending on their size.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   31st July 2012, 10:55 am

This would need a much longer charge time. o.o It is an A-Ranked technique.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   31st July 2012, 11:38 am

edited >.>
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   31st July 2012, 11:39 am

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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   1st August 2012, 7:36 pm

Name: Captivating Clone
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Sight
Type: Supplementary
Hand seals: Bird, Snake, Tiger
Targeted sense/'es: Sight, Touch, Sound
Description: This is an advanced version of the Academy Level Illusion Clone. Unlike its parent technique whose purpose to produce intangible copies of the user, this jutsu produces a sensational copy. The clone is a genjutsu itself that triggers upon sight of it. Those who allow the clone to enter their vision feel naturally as if their own thought they must keep watch of the clone. Their line of vision becomes permanently locked on the clone, unable to change. Turning away from it becomes nearly impossible, for the body's major muscles become struck by paralysis that can be fought against but produces excruciating pain through the genjutsu, as if every muscle is being torn as they try to move it. The resistance they feel against their body's movements seems to snap them back into the same position like a rubberband. The clone looks and feels real and makes appropriate sounds in interaction with the environment but that is only part of the illusion. The clone only runs or walks in a path directed by the user's own sight. The user can not allow the clone to leave his field of vision or else it fades. Once someone is released from the genjutsu, they are free to do whatever as long as they avoid looking at the clone again, doing so will only capture them again and they will have to free themselves once again.
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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   3rd August 2012, 4:29 pm

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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   5th August 2012, 1:44 am

Name: Phantom Crow Assault
Rank: B-Rank
Element/'s: Wind Release
Range: 25 Meters
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub Type: Offensive, Supplementary
Hand seals: Tiger, Boar, Ram, Clap Hands
Description: This is a derived jutsu of the Multiple Phantom Shuriken jutsu. The user of the jutsu first forms the three initial seals, then proceeds to throw a small number of kunai or shuriken, followed by the clapping of their hands. The result is the very same multiple phantom jutsu, creating corporeal replicas. However, there is a use of shape transformation that occurs. The resulting copies and original weapon do not appear as the weapon thrown but instead a murder of crows flying in a path similar to that of the orignally thrown shuriken/kunai. This is to confuse and deceive the opponent. Not only that but there is an added air current that pushes these crows with speed increasing the power of the disguised weapons. Only upon impact do the crows return to their original form as weapons, revealing the secret attack.

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Name: Wind Prison Technique
Rank: B-Rank
Element/'s: Wind Release
Range: 1 meter
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub Type: Offensive
Hand seals: Bird, Tiger, Boar, Hare, Ram
Description: This is a direct variation of the water prison technique. The user controls the flow of wind around a target with their hand. The wind around the target moves at a fast and sharp pace, creating a barrier around them that will prevent escape and defend against outside interference, much like the Water Prison Technique. However due to the element affinity, the wind if physically touched can cut as well. From the inside is a more dangerous effect. Unlike the drowning factor of the water prison, in the wind prison the target is without air, for the flow of wind pulls air outward, and prevents anything from getting in, including oxygen. So in time it's possible for the person caught to pass out or worse die being inside, no differently than the water prison. (2 posts to pass out, 3 posts to die) The user of said technique must keep their arm raised to sustain the prison but direct contact with it is not necessary or possible, instead they have to be close to it, within 1 meter. This cost a d-rank amount of chakra to sustain per post.

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Name: Body of Wind
Rank: B-Rank
Element/'s: Wind
Range: 8 meters
Type: Ninjutsu
Sub Type: Offensive, Supplementary
Hand seals: Tiger
Description: The user creates a clone of compressed air. This is not a form of shadow clone, so there is no returning of information. The clone can use jutsu. The clone is fragile and pretty much is destroyed upon hard impact or with jutsu of equal or higher rank. The surprise is that when the clone is destroyed, it releases the compressed air in a violent twisting form of slicing wind that can very well maim as well as knock people away within a range of 8 meters. So what the clone lacks in defense and some offense, it makes up for with the sudden air release.


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PostSubject: Re: الى من يريد ان يحيا مع المسيح ج8 والاخير   5th August 2012, 6:43 pm

For the first one, please add an actual range, long ranged is kinda vague.

Second, errr, the Water Prison can't kill or harm anyone, so I would like you to increase the rank of yer harmful wind prison and perhaps add a time limit for the whole knocking out/killing part.

The last one....dun seem like a C-Rank. It will be fine if you add a bit of a weaker knocking back effect.
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